I need advice on the resume I just wrote?

I just wrote my resume and want opinions on things I need to fix or advice on how to make it better....





Qualification Highlights





Tremendous motivational and leadership skills


Excellent communication and organizational skills


Proficient in Windows and Microsoft Office (Excel and Word)


Excellent self starter


Work well under pressure and deadline oriented








Employment History





State National Bank/Compass, Ft. Worth, TX 6/06-present


Commercial teller


Provide high quality customer service


Handled a wide array of customer transactions including deposits, withdraws, and loan payments


Above average performance reviews and excellent balancing history


Heavy cash handling including bank vault transactions


Order cash from the Federal Reserve for four branches


Assist Lead Teller with job duties when out of the office


Assist in the training of new hires








Drivetime Car Sales, Dallas, TX 6/03-5/05


Title Clerk


Verified title transfer paperwork


Calculates tax, transfer and license fees


Keeps vehicle records in computer up-to-date


Identifies and prepares customer refunds


General clerical duties including answering phones, filing, greeting customers, faxing, and coping





Drivetime Car Sales, Haltom City, TX 01/02-6/03


Office Manager


Determines work procedures, prepared work schedules, and expedites work flow


Hires, orients, evaluates, and terminates office staff


Coordinates the completion of and submits paperwork for newly hired employees


Studies and standardizes procedures to improve effectiveness of staff





Wells Fargo Bank, Fort Worth, TX 08/01-12/01


Teller


Processed routine financial transactions including cashing checks, withdrawals, deposits, and loan payments


Maintains appropriate levels of cash on hand


Prepares daily paperwork according to branch procedures


Responsible for managing and balancing cash drawer


Meet and exceed all sales goals





Bank One, Fort Worth, TX 3/00-6/01


Teller


Processed routine financial transactions including cashing checks, withdrawals, deposits, and loan payments


Maintains appropriate levels of cash on hand


Prepares daily paperwork according to branch procedures


Responsible for managing and balancing cash drawer


Meet and exceed all sales goals


Ran the commercial window


Responsible for all vault transactions








Skills


Heavy cash handling, Management, Sales, Computers (Windows, Excel, Access, Outlook, Word, and Works), Internet, Inventory Control, Negotiating, Scheduling, Project Management, Quality Control, 10 Key, Customer Service, Detail Oriented, Loyal, and very dedicated








Education


Haltom High School, Haltom City, TX





Tarrant County College, Ft Worth, TX|||a few pointers from me





QUALIFICATION HIGHLIGHTS


What you have here are not qualifications - they are traits.


They are important but they need to go in the section that you call skills further down








SKILLS - These are the hard skills that should be listed under Qualifications at the top





DO NOT list the high school - just the college, the degree and the year of graduation








Ran the commercial window - change that to Managed the commercial window (sounds more impressive)





Your tenses are all over the place - some are present tense and others are past tense.





everything should be past tense.





Here is the first job as an example





Commercial teller


Provided high quality customer service


Handled a wide range of transactions including deposits, withdraws, and loan payments


Above average performance reviews and excellent balancing history


Heavy cash handling including bank vault transactions


Ordered cash from the Federal Reserve for four branches


Assisted Lead Teller with job duties when out of the office


Assisted in the training of new hires





Much better - more consistency


now do the others so they read the same





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Good luck.