Thursday, December 8, 2011

Can someone please critique my resume?

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PROFESSIONAL SUMMARY


I possess the specific skills and knowledge 鈥?most importantly- the dedication and commitment to ensure that any task is completed on time and professionally.





Key accomplishments include:


鈥?Skilled at all Microsoft Office 2007 Applications


鈥?Able to Work Well in a Swiftly Changing Environment


鈥?Positive Attitude and Excellent Attention to Detail.


鈥?Fire fighter Certified ; CPR %26amp; AED Certified


鈥?US Army Veteran





EDUCATION


Masters of Science in Business Management 2009 to present


Colorado Technical University


鈥?Relevant Coursework:


o Applied Managerial Decision-Making


o Project Management


o Project Planning


o Marketing in the Digital Age





Bachelor of Science in Human services 2006 to 2009


Colorado Technical University


鈥?GPA: 3.14


鈥?Relevant Coursework:


o Accounting for Non-Accounting Majors


o Managing Human Resources


o Organizational Leadership





Firefighter 1%26amp;2 Hazmat Ops %26amp; Awareness 2009 to 2009


St Clair County Community College


鈥?GPA: 3.65 / 4.00


鈥?Response to Terrorist Bombings Awareness certificate


鈥?FF1 , FF2, and Hazmat ops/awareness


鈥?56 FEMA Certification


鈥?Organizational Leadership








06/05 Associate of Applied Science/Human Services 2002 to 2004


Concentrated in Criminal Justice %26amp; Human Services


Baker College, Port Huron, MI


Essential Courses:


鈥?Legal Issues in Corrections, Client Growth and


Development, Security, Abnormal Psychology, General Psychology,


Sociology, Workplace Communication, American Political Systems,


Information Systems Theory, Word Processing, Mathematics for Business.





PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE


Jones Monument 03/08 to present


Monument designer, stone cutter Port Huron, Mi


鈥?Through my experience at Jones monument I was in charge of basic hand design of tombstone, as well as unsupervised field work. Field work consisted of using GPS navigation for mapping cemeteries plots, as well as engraving tombstones by hand within them. Attention to detail was a key aspect through this position.








Store Manager 12/05 to 10/07


Wireless Solutions Fort Gratiot, Mi


鈥?This position was minimal supervised by our CIO and required new challenging tasks for me. Supervision of store employees, training, as well as multiple inventory transfers were key requirements. The continual changes made by the wireless carriers, meant keeping on top of the new technology for our customers. Weekly quotas and reports aided with these responsibilities.





Security/Maintenance 01/04 to 03/07


Baker College Port Huron, Mi


鈥?This was an entry level position that I worked as a part time student worker; well attending college. A typical day would consist of cleaning classrooms, bathrooms, and carpets. The company vehicle was used to remove snow in winter, or to pick up supplies off campus. Reviewing security cameras was a daily task that was divided between myself and other staff on the maintenance department. I also tented to the general Maintenance of the company vehicle





Store Manager 2000 to 2002


Wireless Accessories Fort Gratiot, Mi


鈥?Through my experience at Wireless Accessories I learned about the aspects of being a supervisor/Manager of a store. Daily responsibilities included opening/ closing the store, nightly deposits, taking inventory of products, direct ordering from suppliers, and working with customers. Weekly duties consisted of creating a by-weekly work schedule for 15 employees, employee training, interviewing, hiring/terminations, employee payroll recorded keeping.








Human resource specialist 2000 To 2004


US Army


鈥?Organizing, maintaining and reviewing personnel records


鈥?Entering and retrieving personnel information using computers


鈥?Processing recommendations for awards and decorations


鈥?Arranging awards ceremonies and preparing, updating and coordinating


requests for evaluations


鈥?Preparing and monitoring Soldier requests for ID cards and tags,


leaves of absence and passes


鈥?Ordering and maintaining office supplies and Maintaining filing


systems








Additional Certifications


鈥?Professional Communication Certification from Colorado University


鈥?Certification of Achievement from Federal Emergency Management Institute


鈥?56 additional Certifications in various areas of Federal Emergency Management from FEMA|||What kind of job are you applying for right now? I don't understand about 1/2 of the terms that you use in this resume. Don't include every form of training that you've had unless it's relevant to the position you're applying for. Spell out abbreviations "Ops" should be "Operations" to help someone who isn't familiar with the lingo get through it without having to re-read and interpret a bunch of times.





Include your expected graduation date for your master's degree.





"Accounting for Non-Accounting Majors" looks like a slacker class. I don't know whether it is or not, but that's what it sounds like. I wouldn't mention it on your resume.





Don't over-capitalize. For example, "Able to Work Well in a Swiftly Changing Environment" is too much capitalization. Change to, "Able to work well in a swiftly changing environment." In your dates, the "to" between the two dates doesn't need to be capitalized either. Also, don't under-capitalize. Right now, you're not even capitalizing the state abbreviations consistently. All job titles need to be capitalized too.





For one of your GPAs you just state the GPA and for the other you say your GPA "/4.00" Either is fine, but you have to be consistent. Either just say your GPA or say that it is on a 4.00 scale, but don't do one way in one place and the other in another place. Also, include your cumulative GPA to date for your master's degree.





You include months and years for some of your jobs and just years for the rest. You have to be consistent. Choose a format and stick to it.





You've got tons of little errors. For example, "well attending college" instead of "while attending college" and "tented to the general Maintenance of the company vehicle" instead of "tended to the general maintenance of the company vehicle" (note both the spelling error AND the capitalization error). You need to do some serious proofreading.|||Join Now For Exclusive Content!


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